Monday, February 9, 2015
Blog due 2/12
By this point you should have started your profile essay and, hopefully, already did an interview. Regardless of what stage you are at with your essay, I am sure you are thinking about how you will organize your narrative, build your characters, create unity, build scene, and, most importantly, kee your readers interested. I would like you to draft one paragraph of your essay here. It can be any part: intro, body, conclusion. The goal is to begin thinking about the way this will be written and get some feedback before the draft is due in a week from myself and your peers.
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(Haven't done interview yet)
ReplyDeleteCoach Bob Boutin is 50 years old and a current hitting instructor of his own business named 4 for 4 hitting instruction in Plymouth Massachusetts. The name of his business was inspired by his former college jersey number of number 4. He is a Plymouth resident and former head baseball coach and player at Brandice University.
This sounds pretty awesome! Did baseball ever become a hassle rather than a love of the sport for him?
DeleteI`ve worked wiuth him for a year now and ive seen him on a daily and i can honestly say that i dont think baseball has ever been a hassle for him.
DeleteHe has so much passion for the game.
Jared Crawford
ReplyDeleteMagic wear all began with a simple phrase “ That was magic”. At every golf course, or sporting venue across the world, sometimes events happens that no one can explain, magic, as Rick puts it. “When you’re in the moment and see it happening, you have to give credit where credit is due and “MAGIC” is at the top of the list of compliments”. Although he could not pinpoint the year he had the idea to create a clothing company, Ricky said he had visions of it his whole life. While on the links in Europe and America, Ricky says that too many times was a shot he hit described as unreal.
Life wasn't the easiest thing in Egypt for Tariq Ali. Through the ups and downs of growing up in Egypt, him and his family made it back to America by the age of 7. This wasn't the last time he was going to see his homeland though. "If you're walking down the road with a pair of Jordans on, odds are you're going to get jumped". While telling me stories of his childhood, Tariq stated that this here has happened to him before.
ReplyDeleteDanny,
DeleteTariq seems like a perfect subject for a profile piece! I am sure Tariq has a very complex profile, having gone through so much. I look forward to reading about him and his life.
Sounds like a great start. Should be interesting to read about the culture change for Tariq
DeleteBill's job of announcing games extends further than our sporting events here at Bridgewater. Many have heard the deep, enthusiastic voice and have wanted him to announce their games as well. Bill still finds time to announce games at his old high school which has lead to him being recruited by the Massachusetts Interscholastic Athletic Association to announce games for the high school state tournament games around the state. As far the college level goes, Bill was recently asked to announce games for Stonehill basketball after being heard by their athletic event coordinator.
ReplyDeleteThis sounds very interesting.
DeleteAt age twenty, Ellis Robinson attends Sheffield-Hallam University in South Yorkshire, England. Born in Bradford, an area in Western Yorkshire known for it's ethnic & racial diversity, he tries to see people for who they are, rather than how they appear. Being brought up in an area like this, Ellis has always taken pleasure in helping others. It is his desire to aid others that drives him for a degree in sociology, which will confirm his future as a social worker.
ReplyDelete(Interview not done yet)
ReplyDeleteAt age 36, Alison Thurston has three children and owns her own Martial Arts school with her husband Joe Thurston. She teaches karate, Brazilian ju jitsu, women's kickboxing and sports conditioning classes. She met her husband when she was 25, a police officer who introduced her to martial arts. Before this she taught a variety of work out classes such as spin and aerobic classes.
(Interview has been done but I thought I would give a bio piece first before getting into the why, where, what, and how's)
ReplyDeleteDr. James E. Leone is an Associate Professor of Health at Bridgewater State University. Dr. Leone is also an adjunct faculty member in Physical Therapy and Physician Assistant Studies in the Bouve College of Health Sciences at Northeastern University in Boston, MA.
Prior to joining the faculty at Bridgewater State University, Dr. Leone was a Visiting Assistant Professor of Exercise Science in the School of Public Health and Health Services at The George Washington University in Washington, D.C. Between 2002 and 2006, Leone served as a Clinical Assistant Professor, Program Director, and Clinical Education Coordinator for the Athletic Training Education Program at Southern Illinois University Carbondale (SIUC).
In 2007, Leone completed his PhD in health education from SIUC. In 2002 Leone had obtained his Master of Science degree from Indiana State University in athletic training and research methods. Prior to that, he spent three years at Boston University and after much consideration left BU to take a year off and think about what he wanted from his education. After that year off, Leone applied and completed his undergraduate degree at Bridgewater State University. In 2001, he received a Bachelor of Science degree in physical education and athletic training.
Although I have known Greg for nearly ten years, I find that I actually know very little about him. Greg works for R&L Carriers, a shipping company, and has been making deliveries to my parents' small business for almost ten years. Throughout the years I have known Greg from his pop-ins to the office on delivery days, I have never seen him in absense of a glowing smile. He always has a high-five and a joke ready to share. One can tell that he is a man of many stories and much wisdom.
ReplyDeleteI'm also doing my paper on someone I've known for a long time, and like you, I still have much to learn about the person. I think that there are many interesting directions you could take to profile your "mail man". I look forward to reading your paper.
Delete(I haven't done a formal interview just yet)
ReplyDeleteMary Elizabeth Trull was going to be an actress. She had dreams of the big screen from the time she could talk. She started acting at the age of five, but knew that she was destined for the big screen. When she turned twenty-one she embarked on a trip that seemed like it was from a movie. She drove across the country to California.
I can tell this is going to be an interesting profile. I would never be as ambitious as to leave everything familiar for a dream, the risk is just too great. However, I have respect for those that can & hope they reach them.
DeleteMary Shinkwin is an athletic trainer for Cambridge Rindge and Latin high school. How she got there, however, isn't as black and white as some may think. While she graduated high school as an honors student on her way to Regis, she wasn't planning her path towards athletic training just yet. Simply interested in science, she started college as a biology major; though it was her viewpoint that every class should be taken seriously. She hadn't closed her doors just because she had selected a major, because being open-minded at all stages of life is a core value of Mary.
ReplyDeleteColonel Molly McGlaughlin of the United States Army is a hero we can all look up to. After serving multiple tours over seas and coming home to her two children, she has now transformed herself into a successful business woman. However, this transformation was no walk in the park. After going through a rough divorce with her husband, also a member of the U.S. Army and raising her two children basically on her own. Becoming a strong single mother was no easy task. She had bills to pay, kids to raise, a unit in the army she was still leader of and she was trying to become a prosperous business woman. All this while she was trying to make the switch back to normal everyday life. That is why Colonel McGlaughlin is not just a hero for what she did for our country, but also for showing us what being a mother and leader is all about.
ReplyDeleteThis profile sounds interesting to me. I am also a single mother. Although I haven't accomplished nearly what Molly McGlaughlin has in her life, I realize the struggle it is to take on many roles. To keep pushing towards your goals and not give up.
DeleteCecelia DeMarco a women of many talents. She is in the hall of fame of the University of New Hampshire and also Bridgewater State University, she was the athletic director at BSU as well. She coached at many colleges and successfully achieved her masters in physical education at BSU. Although she succeeded in what she studied her true dream was to become a police officer and fight for justice, at the age of 53 she did just that and became an officer in Portsmouth, NH.
ReplyDeleteI remember the first time I witnessed John getting high. He was heating cocaine in a spoon. He made a pipe out of a used pepsi bottle, burned a hole on the side to take a hit from. Put tin foil on top and filled it with cigarette ashes. When the cocaine had formed into a rock it was ready to smoke.He took a hit, then another and then one big one and held it in as long as he could. After that he would smoke a cigarette and start pacing the room. John became paranoid. Peering out windows and checking and rechecking the locks on the doors. I thought to myself what does he think is going to happen? I tried to calm him down but it was useless. This went on until the sun came up. He had nothing left to smoke. The party was over. Little did I know it really never ended.
ReplyDeleteGreat attention grabber. Crazy as well that you were around to have witnessed such a sight. Ive seen cocaine being used, and i sort of chuckled to myself while reading this... because it really is pointless to calm someone who is high. I'm not sure who this person is to you but i hope they arein a better place now. But reguardless, great topic for keeping readers engaged.
DeleteI totally missed this blog entry... and even though i completed this essay.... i still wanted to write something on how i constructed my essay.
ReplyDeleteDuring this time, we were getting snow storm after snow storm... i have become good friends with my chosen subject's (Adam Camacho) wife. We had delivered our first children 10 days apart from one another (clearly we had similar "fun times" during the time of our insemination... yes i went there.) I had conducted a written interview and emailed it to him. I was 100% positive that Adam would be detailed and hold nothing back. We both had bonded over our unfiltered ways. Subtly is not our strong suit. I have had plenty of oppportunities to observe him, see him act in his day to day life at home, seeing him interact with friends, his wife, his children, his dogs... observing his personal space. I'm a virgo - i cant help but analyze.
When i recieved my completed interview, he still left me with information i didn't anticipate. Which is great for writing... and it helped bring us closer as friends. I am so proud to have written on him as my chosen profile essay subject. I did a lot of cutting and pasting... moving things around. Writing is like that for me... a puzzle and knowing what to put in the beginning, middle, and end... and what to keep out. Adam Camacho came out to me as bisexual... but i didnt want that to be the basis of my essay. I figured it would be to cliche and more importantly i felt that it would show to readers that what i cared about. I honestly don't give a crap about his sexual orientation. I care about character so my goal was that... to show his character, not his choices.